lost in a familiar place

[Shucklak]

scars
a drop of blood
that familiar sting
an invisible mouth

like a shark maddened by the scent of blood
like a madman tying a hangmans knot

a stain on a mirror
the blade of a knife
a lie

screaming without making a sound

men on a streetcorner
a fistful of dollars
dirty water
a siren
a smoldering cigarette

desperation and apathy at the same time
as the clock runs backwards and the sky falls
and the earth is consumed by flame

the animal that murders itself trying to escape its cage

existing for the next day, hour, minute

not existing

fuck it

you
dont
have
a
choice
.

 

[plazma]

This poem really captured me, I found it an extremely compelling piece to read.

I like the free-formed structure of this poem, and the way in which you move from one powerful image to another, the poem quickens pace towards the end and that just makes it all the more powerful and punchy.

Damn nice work!

-plaz out-

 

[Shucklak]

hey, thanks!

 

[blahblahblah]

men on a streetcorner
a fistful of dollars
dirty water
a siren
a smoldering cigarette

Simple imagery does it for me...

Id like to hear more

 

[Frosty da snowman]

nice!

 

[cherub]

love the way this is written, strong and powerful, always a plus to catch your attention

 

[neverwas]

nice

 

[Nietzche]

eschatotastic!

 

[LilkelPixy]

i like the way this is written....