Lord Vlad's Spike

[TiberCross]

our eyes are connecting
directly ineffectively
our id's are coercing
desperate and disturbing
our faces show no emotion
except pale exhaustion

our breath can only save us from this moment

our lives' a coiled rattlesnake
in spiral and ready to strike
our minds reactionary; dismal
and draining from Lord Vlad's spike.

 

[wallytuggs]

hard flow, I think you could extend more

 

[RareForm]

nice and short, sometimes they just gotta be like that.....good poem.

 

[Altered_Soul9]

^^^took th ewords from my mouth. Nice