kiss me, kill me.

[rewiiired]

Childish jealousy rising in me
in the dark and strobe of a bar in a college town
he whispers, he touches, he shows her his tattoo
she wants his number, I want to
break the piece of shit in two.

I know it's just childish jealousy.

Bear the last song, smoke another
cigarette I cannot afford, then the four of us
run out into the ohio cold and to the car
and on the way home she asks me
what's wrong and I tell her
it's just childish jealousy
and she rests her head
on my shoulder and

it strikes me
she's so greedy
she always wants control
sly and sexy, she revels in torture
like so many others

she doesn't want me
she doesn't want him
she's like a vampire of the soul

back home
after the rest have fallen asleep
she says she has to go,
to drive home, in this
rain, this snow, this sleet pouring down

and she looks at me
so close, so warm, so sweetly
and I lean closer, she turns away
then I turn back, she waits
then she

Kisses me, kills me,
runs away again.

it strikes me
she's so greedy
she always wants control
sly and sexy, she revels in torture
like so many others

she doesn't want me
she doesn't want him
she's like a vampire of the soul

For some reason I adore her,
but like the rest she's torture,
so I hate her just the same.

 

[chrissy]

awesome illustration here.
i can identify with both parties mentioned here.
i can really feel ur emotions thru this, and for that... all kudos to u. wonderful!

chrissy

 

[Raz]

Yeah that was really good...there's a lot of pieces I read and can hear easily as a song, this is one of them...nice work!

 

[Chaotic Action Man]

of the poems i've read of yours i think i might like this one the best.

it flowed so beautifully, and the words and message...ugh! reminds me with heart wrenching crystal clarity, of a love in the past, and the poetic pain it caused.

great work.

"it strikes me
she's so greedy
she always wants control
sly and sexy, she revels in torture
like so many others

she doesn't want me
she doesn't want him
she's like a vampire of the soul"

i really liked how you repeated this.

 

[StuffedTiger]

so good, it made me wonder if you were dating my girlfriend...

 

[iLoveYouWithaKnife]

I liked this. I missed this the first time around, I guess.

I really like how it starts off slow and calm, as though you are the problem, and then BAM, the real truth.

Childish jealousy rising in me
in the dark and strobe of a bar

Heh, doesn't it seem that is where it is always MOST apparent....

 

[katmeow]

For some reason I adore her,
but like the rest she's torture,
so I hate her just the same.

I love those lines.

Good stuff, as usual

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Oh I once knew someone like that, you describe the inner conflict so well!

 

[-|Twiztd|-]

Amazing poem: Great Read Rewiiired:

 

[neverwas]

For some reason I adore her,
but like the rest she's torture,
so I hate her just the same.

your wirtting is still one of my favourites in this forum

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

hi

i love this. it is so good. i think i understand what you may be saying in my own way. we all take these things in different ways. but by the sound of it, it sounds alot like what i am going through. good work. hope to see more.

 

[cherub]

lately i have seen changes in your writting. awesone work
you been more and more touching base were people can relate. GREAT JOB!

 

[up all night]

Always love your work, ever when I don't respond, however I had to reply to this one. Reading this was such an experience... so perfectly expressed that I felt like I was you and I was the one experiencing all these emotions.

Fantastic work.