i wonder

[Chaotic Action Man]

spinning uncontrollably,
partially submerged,
struggling vainly
against the pull,
a little leaf
passes gracefully through
the golden patches of sunlight
glistening off the surface
of the swiftly moving river.

rolling and turning,
down past the branches
that dip their hands
into the green glacial water
trying to rescue this
Ophelia of a figure
who so tragically fell far,
landing
only to be swept away
once more.

I watch it pass out of sight
and around the bend.
not soon after I wonder
was I wrong to let it go?
should I have reached down,
hands cupped gently
to lay it bare upon the rocks to dry?
I wonder.

 

[RareForm]

rolling and turning,
down past the branches
that dip their hands
into the green glacial water
trying to rescue this
Ophelia of a figure
who so tragically fell far,
landing
only to be swept away
once more.

oooohhh...this paragraph really caught me, very poetic, and awesome and everything...GREAT write!

 

[cherub]

I like the way this sounds when i read it and it makes me feel like i am spinning in one place trying to keep track of thoughts..great stuff !

 

[katmeow]

Nice imagery, I really enjoyed reading this one