i want to kill a rich man, too

[onetwothreefour]

i want to kill a rich man
to make up for the blood he shed
i want to kill a rich man
and paint the walls in red
i want to kill a rich man
to starve him of his rights
i want to kill a rich man
and make him fight his fights
i want to kill a rich man
just to make him see
i want to kill a rich man
then maybe we'd be free

 

[plazma]

F-_-K!

Extremely fucking potent work there.

I don't know if I could ever hope to condense thoughts down to words that well and with that good a sense of timing and rhythm.

Diabolical genius, and if I haven't thought that a billion times, I'm a fucking cockroach.

-plaz out-

 

[LahLahGatecrasher]

*cheers*

 

[onetwothreefour]

Re: F-_-K!

Extremely fucking potent work there.

I don't know if I could ever hope to condense thoughts down to words that well and with that good a sense of timing and rhythm.

Diabolical genius, and if I haven't thought that a billion times, I'm a fucking cockroach.

i feel as if i'm *not* supposed to respond to these, but then, i feel rude if i don't...so i will

thanks - i think the rhythm of the piece comes from the fact that the only poetry i can write is either simple a-b-a-b rhyming, or stuff with zero flow at all, so hold your positive judgements until i inundate this place with stuff that's all exactly the same, save the subject

thanks though, and i figured you'd like the topic

apparently i have much pent-up rage inside of me...i love writing :D

 

[AmorRoark]

But what if you become the rich man?

 

[onetwothreefour]

then i shall attempt to change things, and divide my wealth. plus, it's somewhat metaphorical (thanks for reading :D).

 

[faithfully dangerous]

i dont normally like rhyming and stuff but 1234 you done did a decent job here son!

 

[Pomplemous]

no way! that was ace - dont ever say you are not sure of your stuff, I liket he repetition of the same line, had me singing it in the tuneof IF I WAS A RICH MAN

I'd be running for my life now! hahah

 

[Raz]

I thought I replied to this when you originally posted it but obviously not...really like this, sounds like it'd make a great song..

 

[TiberCross]

good bump, Pomplemous. and i too enjoyed the straightforward language and the repitition gave that hard-hitting line an incisive edge

 

[^Pipit^]

Just cool, that is

 

[onetwothreefour]

thanks guys

 

[Cat Again]

really fucking awesome piece.

 

[cherub]

definately a good bump for a great poem,,,,,,, thanks