I sunk your battleship

[Raz]

petty little girls
playing battleships
(badly)
one blind stab after
another
until something's been sunk
even if the prize isn't worth the effort
you still wage war
every day
just to be able to say
you've won
because winning nothing
is better than losing something
and every new face
is just a new boat
to capsize.

 

[New]

God, that is a tough thing to go through. Eloquenty put.

 

[up all night]

Such a seemingly bitter portrayal of the femme fatale from one of the most humanistic people I've met. I liked it.

 

[katmeow]

This reminds me of times that shaped me more than I care to admit.

 

[itscalledthrusting]

Ha love this, reminds me of my older brother and I.

 

[psycosynthesis]

This gave me tingles, which to me, means that it has done it's job as a poem. Simplistic but moving.

I especially liked: "because winning nothing
is better than losing something"

 

[Jabberwocky]

the allegory is wonderful. Thanks for sharing.

 

[mealltach]

This is awesome, Raz. I haven't drifted into words for a long time, so I am happy to see that you are still producing great stuff. My favourite kind of poetry expresses things without having to resort to showy language. Also, this:

because winning nothing
is better than losing something

just slays me. Cheers.

 

[exoiced]

because winning nothing
is better than losing something

genius - raz