I just wrote this cus like, i wanna be a poet and shit...

[breakyaself]

spin me sugar lard
grate me lustful dreams

im falling into you

rough lips
chilli tequila
black lines of synthetic lace

do you want me to take off

my panties
my anxieties
my obsession

with you.

 

[knight_marshall]

"spin me sugar lard
grate me lustful dreams

i'm falling into you"

I really liked that... then I started thinking about how I want to get you off, not 'take you off' sowwwwy

 

[onetwothreefour]

this is exactly the kind of thing i would imagine you writing, mel (which is handy, since you did write it ).

i really like it. i feel kind of dirty, but kind of glamourous. write some more...

 

[up all night]

i really like it. i feel kind of dirty, but kind of glamourous. write some more...

Yep, that's it. The way you write is such a good representation of your personality.

 

[kazza_baby]

An elegant representation of your feelings.
Simple, yet conveys much more after a second or third reading.

 

[Doppelganger]

i really like it. i feel kind of dirty, but kind of glamourous. write some more...

Well said!

This was pretty damn good.

 

[(Wordy)]

Yeah, I like this one too.

It's sensory, sexy... and has bite.