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i hate to break the facade (work in progress)

onetwothreefour

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simplicity just as acoustic dylan cester
kweller cobain buckley contemporary store their
thoughts in short, too-popular imprints on the
horizon of those who don't care,
or care less than they should

we all care too much

no one cares at all

and he sobs and drops the pen:
there's a finality in the way she stares at him
her acoustic heart is still plath ginsberg
her own frost wilde who cared too much
for nobody to respond with emotion

no one listens to them

they nod (but); keep writing

it doesn't hurt them the real artists
with their real art, but still it's unfair
because all they do is tell us how we
feel, but all we do is tell them
that we don't feel at all

the facade is fun

and i hate to be the one to break it open
 
^^^ :)

redrafted (now with fifty percent more capitals! ;)):

Simplicity, just as acoustic Dylan Cester
Kweller Cobain Buckley store their contemporary
Feelings in short, too-popular imprints on the
Horizon of those who don't care,
Or care less than they should

We all care too much

No one cares at all

And he sobs and drops the pen:
There's a finality in the way she stares at him
Her acoustic heart is still Plath Ginsberg
Her own Frost Wilde who cared too much
For nobody to respond with emotion

No one listens to them

They nod (but); keep writing

It doesn't hurt them - real artists
With their real art, but still it's unfair
Because all they do is tell us how we
Feel, and all we do is tell them
That we don't feel at all

The facade is our comfort

And I hate to be the one to break it open
 
That is a little sore, nicely though.

We all care too much

No one cares at all

And he sobs and drops the pen:
There's a finality in the way she stares at him

its all contextual i guess, but thats mean a fair bit.
 
"sore" is how it felt (feels) for me too, so thank you.

context is one of the most horrible parts of the human experience (yet, on a good day - which are too few and far between - it's also one of the greatest; such is life).

i wish i could just detach, or pretend to, like some are able to.
 
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