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hey you
the girl with the cigarette
and the half washed hair
and the stone washed dreams
what's the time
or when's it time to go
pack up and leave
the urban - surburban gutter.

Are we there yet?
or are we still wasting days
holding on to helpless hopeless wishing
trees with leaves that break off and drift away
like the boy who never really loved you.

I can see the cigarette burns on your arms
the fire twinkle in eyes
as your tears become vessels to clean
the grime that gets stuck on truth on youth on purity.
You missed a spot
you should know by now
even Jesus washed his feet.

so you
the girl with the cigarette
and the dew still trembling on her knees
please take heed of simple words my dear:

The gutter is no place
to forget who you are.
 
Your words are almost as beautiful as you are :)

I don't speak up much about it, but I always lurk and read. Your poetry never ceases to amaze me.
xx
 
I can see the cigarette burns on your arms
the fire twinkle in eyes
as your tears become vessels to clean
the grime that gets stuck on truth on youth on purity.
You missed a spot
you should know by now
even Jesus washed his feet.

so you
the girl with the cigarette
and the dew still trembling on her knees
please take heed of simple words my dear:

The gutter is no place
to forget who you are.

very well done.

so honest and yet so gentle.

i miss reading you.
 
up all night said:

what's the time
or when's it time to go
pack up and leave
the urban - surburban gutter.

Are we there yet?
or are we still wasting days
holding on to helpless hopeless wishing
trees with leaves that break off and drift away
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honey sometimes its so hard to write a reply that really comes across as meaninglful to a piece that feels like it has so many of the questions i feel in it. and so many of the answers that would/should work. this reads like a song worth crying to.

you keep going on coz even though theres no further to go, nothing new to find, theres always the hope that maybe youre wrong...

much love. youve got my number, drive down the coast and visit me some time :)
 
up all night said:

Are we there yet?
or are we still wasting days
holding on to helpless hopeless wishing
trees with leaves that break off and drift away
like the boy who never really loved you.
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God, you don't know how much those lines struck a chord with me :\
 
O fall your pieces this is the one that I like best so far. It is extremely well written and captures this state of being very well. YOu know what you need to do. Good luck!

:)Smiley
 
reading this again reminded me of this song, similar theme. its one of my old favorites...

Pink Floyd - Hey You

Hey you, out there in the cold
Getting lonely, getting old
Can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisles
With itchy feet and fading smiles
Can you feel me?
Hey you, don’t help them to bury the light
Don’t give in without a fight.

Hey you, out there on your own
Sitting naked by the phone
Would you touch me?
Hey you, with you ear against the wall
Waiting for someone to call out
Would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I’m coming home.

But it was only fantasy.
The wall was too high,
As you can see.
No matter how he tried,
He could not break free.
And the worms ate into his brain.

Hey you, standing in the road
Always doing what you’re told,
Can you help me?
Hey you, out there beyond the wall,
Breaking bottles in the hall,
Can you help me?
Hey you, don’t tell me there’s no hope at all
Together we stand, divided we fall.
 
^^^^ funny i have been in a pink floyd mood lately and thought about that.
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this one is great,,,,,,, some reason i have a feeling you will grow through this in great ways. Good luck

the words in this are simple but yet touching,, i enjoyed reading it alot. >:D<
 
harraser i thought of that song too haha.

i really love this poem. especially

trees with leaves that break off and drift away
like the boy who never really loved you.

i relate to it. thanks for sharing :D
 
harraser: I've never heard that song but I'm definitely going to go check it out. Thanks. And believe me, if I had the time and the money I'd be hopping in my car and getting the fuck out of Sydney to waste some time with you.

star_beats: Every day I wonder why the hell you'd want to be my best friend. And every day I'm gratfeul for the support and the love you provide. I have no idea what state I'd be in without you.

To everyone else, thanks for all the comments. This is the sort of piece that comes from emptying my mind and writing with my eyes closed. Sometimes it feels like no-one has ever been this sad before.
 
i have been thinking over the last week about you and how to reply to this and what to say...so i thought i would put something personal in, but different.


for up_all_night. was thinkn of you just before and wanted to say this...

hey you
the girl with long hair
a heart as big as gold
to none can you compare.

hey you
the girl with the face
your problems are part
of why we love you.
never EVER think you're a disgrace.

hey you
smile for me.
keep your chin up.
dance and learn to have fun.

hey you
im glad that we met
dont EVER under estimate
the friends you have around.

hey you
i love you cause you're a friend.
your time will come
when no longer will you feel down.

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Sometimes it feels like no-one has ever been this sad before.
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ive been there lots of times hun. it sucks but at least once you've hit the bottom the only to get out of it is to go up.

*huggles you*

plus...with friends like us, you cant go wrong ;)
 
I'll go back and read everyone else's responses next, but I first must say...

BRAVO. That's a standing fucking ovation, dear; at the end I felt moved (and between you and me, not much can do that these days. :))
 
up all night said:
Are we there yet?
or are we still wasting days
holding on to helpless hopeless wishing
trees with leaves that break off and drift away
like the boy who never really loved you.
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Yarni I love your passion. Thankyou for being one of my closest friends. I appreciate it like nothing else. That is an amazing poem, an amazing piece of your soul. Thank you for bearing it with us.

In the part that I abbreviated. I know. I know. I know. What you feel.:|
 
That was incredible.. great to read.

I am not really good with replies as i'm not too great with words... but I hope your sadness creeps away, and may the next door that opens be your most enjoyable yet.
 
That was intense...brought me back a couple of years ago when I was really bad off into drugs and the love of my life left me. I didn't sleep most nights and wrote stuff like this to try and get some of the pain out. I will admit this was much better than mine though! Thank You
 
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