Game Haiku Train!

[BK38]

Please explain to me what rule I broke in this thread with that post....

I refer you to literally the first page of this thread:

"this is a simple but fun one from other writing boards:

post a haiku based on the one above you! try to use the last line of the post above as your first - or something thematically close if you can't.

*Rules updated to preserve the "train" part of this game as much as possible

*Haiku is written in 3 lines, each line containing a fixed number of syllables. for the purpose of this game, please stick to 5-7-5 or 5-3-5"

You didn't use a Haiku nor did you link it even remotely thematically to my Haiku

 

[Snafu in the Void]

How was that not Haiku?? Am I retarded and can't count syllables? who is wrong here?

Also, I did continue your path, then took a twist of my own

Yo, If I am wrong please continue to shun me but I have no fucking clue what you're mad about right now

Peace bro need to go take care of some children IRL (literally, not being a smartass)

 

[BK38]

How was that not Haiku?? Am I retarded and can't count syllables? who is wrong here?

Also, I did continue your path, then took a twist of my own

Yo, If I am wrong please continue to shun me but I have no fucking clue what you're mad about right now

Peace bro need to go take care of some children IRL (literally, not being a smartass)

"Somnolent diving (5 syllables)
Upside down (3 syllables)
Who decided poop is brown? (7 syllables)

Haikus always begin and end with 5 syllables, the middle line can be either 3 or 7 syllables. Anyhow, never mind me, this is just a pet peeve of mine and I literally just said the syllable scheme above yours. It just made me want to slam my head into something hard is all.

 

[Jabberwocky]

keep the train going
stop this fight
it's not allowed now.

 

[Snafu in the Void]

"Somnolent diving (5 syllables)
Upside down (3 syllables)
Who decided poop is brown? (7 syllables)

Haikus always begin and end with 5 syllables, the middle line can be either 3 or 7 syllables. Anyhow, never mind me, this is just a pet peeve of mine and I literally just said the syllable scheme above yours. It just made me want to slam my head into something hard is all.

lol my bad.... LSD + alcohol makes your brain work funny

continue on as if I was never here

 

[mtu mwendawazimu]

It's not allowed now
Bow down, loud growl in the wind
You play by my rules

 

[Jabberwocky]

It's not allowed now
Bow down, loud growl in the wind
You play by my rules

You play by my rules
Which are not exactly mine
Let's pretend, OK?

 

[mtu mwendawazimu]

Let's pretend, OK?
Pull down your mask, clown. I think
I've had enough now

 

[BK38]

I've had enough now
Enough is never enough
Nature of the beast

 

[Jabberwocky]

I've had enough now
Enough is never enough
Nature of the beast

Nature of the beast
Sounds like nature of the greed.
One is too much and..

 

[BK38]

One is too much and...
Dante says there's six more love
No life without sin

 

[nuttynutskin]

No life without sin
Because to sin is to win
That you must begin

 

[BK38]

That you must begin
To realize your journey
Fate and Free-will mesh

 

[Snafu in the Void]

normal this sun glare?
just eat it
burn my mouth with love

 

[Juniper Bruhmomentius]

Burn my mouth with love
Attack me
Throw your ass at me

 

[mtu mwendawazimu]

Throw your ass at me
Mosquito
On you ass - i smack

 

[BK38]

On, you ass! - I smack
Donkey punch
I said Giddyup!

 

[mtu mwendawazimu]

I said giddyup!
But i say
A lot of weird things

 

[BK38]

A lot of weird things
found in butts
"Doc, I swear! I fell!"

 

[mtu mwendawazimu]

Doc, i swear i fell!
Bottle caps and baseball bats
Now bring me to life