Grrr! Men!

[Pomplemous]

Will you love me tomorrow when my pride falls down around my ears? Will you touch my heart when it suddenly feels cold?
Will you call my name when I'm nowhere near
And will still cuddle me when there's no one to show?

I want to lay down for you
i want to have you pierce me through
I want to be impaled in that manly fashion
But I cant pretend to forget this passion
Is for tonight only

Well I'm not that lonely.

I love you but I love me more
I dont want to be an obediant squaw
I want your love to be raw
and Mine!
dont give me this shit about needing time
You dont want me? come and tell me when you do
And we'll decide then if I still want you

I guess I dont care enough if you love me
I dont care enough if you think you do
I dont care enough for your persuasions
For I can just about see right through.

My time has come for love and respect
I know I'm better than most
I'm a woman, a lady, a child, I'm a whore
And I know you'll be crawling back for more
But I'm not here to settle some kind of score
So love me and you'll never go poor...for love.

Let me feel your touch....
But make it mine
Dont waste my time
Do not..waste..MY time

For if you are in my eye?......
You will never want me to stop looking.

 

[Xherrus]

Rarely do I feel ambivalent about poetry but in this instance I do. I found this poem to be intimate, threatening, arrogant, lively and repulsive. Sorry if you didn't want to hear that, but why all the anger?

 

[skjalff]

holy shit! This poem is totally addressed to me, I even checked your profile to make sure its not the girl I know!!! That was scary.. need to think that through. But seriously this piece is rough and brilliant. Very driving!! Thanks for sharing!





skjalff

P.S. and no, I didnt find it repulsive at all, its very sexy in a demanding sort of way if you know what i mean whatever

 

[Pomplemous]

Rarely do I feel ambivalent about poetry but in this instance I do. I found this poem to be intimate, threatening, arrogant, lively and repulsive. Sorry if you didn't want to hear that, but why all the anger?

No no that is fair enough - that's not my anger, but then I suppose in some ways it is. But its the feeling of a woman been round the block and learned a few of life's lessons and is looking to date but has felt slightly jaded by the tossers she meets, and is not going to be a girl who pussyfoots all doe eyed at her man - she is not going to sit and pine for any guy, unless she is in love, but yeah - knowing what she wants and is not going to play stupid games to get it.

skjalff: No I am not the one - but maybe that's your poem then - poems all belong to someone.

 

[Pomplemous]

Rarely do I feel ambivalent about poetry but in this instance I do. I found this poem to be intimate, threatening, arrogant, lively and repulsive. Sorry if you didn't want to hear that, but why all the anger?

I actually find that quite a complimentary gathering of words there. I really really like you saying that! ha! maladjusted.

 

[Xherrus]

Well ok then. I'm glad you explained it a bit; at first I just wanted to tell you "fucking get over it!" But everyone learns a few hard lessons in love and your poem portrays that pretty well. I hope you meet a guy who treats you how you want to be treated, if that's what you want... best wishes.

 

[Pomplemous]

^^ haha - i get you.

My time will come and I am not looking to rush it on into mistakes.

In part I must admit I usually write happy stuff, and to me this is happy, because it's a savage attitude, but its better to have that confidence rather than allow yourself and others to grind you into the mud.

Besides and I have to ask - you would say get over it to me, I'd accept that, (kick your ass, but I'll take it haha) but do you say that to others for whom I think their poetry is more unhappy or affected shall we say, by life and things, vulnerable, would you say that to them?

 

[Xherrus]

You'll have to be a bit more particular than that, my dear, but of course some people need consolation when they're down; in short the answer is no, I guess.
Why do you ask?

P.S. Your poem has grown on me and now I like it more than I did at first... LOL.

 

[Pomplemous]

giggle. and here's me saying at work 'I'm just not a salesman' and I am winning you over. haha
it was just a written off the top of my head thing and there was an element of me that wanted to write a bit darker like some others here so I gave it a go. maybe I am here to write shiney poetry only.

Um to your question:
I was asking - well from reading that poem, you dont know who I am or my state of mind - so you read my poem and you come to me saying it's effectively rubbish and fucking get over it (I do not take offence to this, dont worry)
but you dont know that I am not teetering on the edge of sanity - that criticism like that might be enough to crumble -
so.....

be careful what you say I suppose.

ps - I am likig it lesser and lesser now! hahaha

xx

 

[Xherrus]

you dont know who I am or my state of mind - so you read my poem and you come to me saying it's effectively rubbish and fucking get over it (I do not take offence to this, dont worry)...

be careful what you say I suppose.

No no no, it was the attitude I perceived behind the poem that struck me as a bit off and I wanted to be as inoffensive as possible in saying so. It's a fine poem. Of course I don't know you. Gimme a break!!! 8( I'll get out of your thread, geez, talk about passive-aggressive & melodramatic. 8(

 

[onetwothreefour]

i like this. sober brad will hopefully be able to expand more

 

[Pomplemous]

No no no, it was the attitude I perceived behind the poem that struck me as a bit off and I wanted to be as inoffensive as possible in saying so. It's a fine poem. Of course I don't know you. Gimme a break!!! 8( I'll get out of your thread, geez, talk about passive-aggressive & melodramatic. 8(

oh you eejit!! haha - I am not looking to get caught up in a wrangle with you - I couldnt care less about the poem - let's stop and go wrangle over another poem in here - I dont want to get on the wrong side of you!

sorry!!