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[vurtomatic]

f
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l
ing        the echo empty that
autumn       transpires
l
e        swirling circles
a      circular paths
v       
es
(rippling)   through
the air 
caresses the pond
a d
r! p
o           an echo o o . .
of ti(c)me(toc)
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[ 14 February 2003: Message edited by: vurtomatic ]

 

[katmeow]

I love it vurt!

 

[mealltach]

mmmmmmmmm...nummy imagistic.
for some reason i keep thinking about bjork - vespertine, perhaps because the lettering of the lyrics on her website look quite similar.
still, nummmmy. !

 

[smileyfish]

Oh so clever aren't you? Well structured, well presented (though could the font please be larger?) and fantastic imagery - capturing the capturing of a moment in time
...more?

 

[vurtomatic]

thank you for the comments... im still experimenting with this (being only the 3rd piece), anything u say helps
cant do anything about the font im fraid... its the only way to get the poem to display with the right formatting

 

[praetorian]

Keep these up vurt, i really enjoy going over it several times and reading it in different ways. Good work

 

[vurtomatic]

Originally posted by praetorian:
reading it in different ways.
that's part of the fun!