finding a life once lost

[rollinginecstasy]

in search of a life once lost? i hate titling my work anyways. usually a letdown

i'm trying to use different styles of writing cuz i tend to get caught up with the same one, and i'm positive you can classify rambling on with no apparent structure/form as a style of writing. anyways i'd love some honest critiques (just not too honest please). so, yeah, read please. Oh, and normally i don't add smiley faces to my poems but i'm bored and god dammit its an option.

Finally!
Long after second guessing and worry,
but just before fear......
there it is.
It's kinda funny (kinda sad too in a way),
how the most important thing you've ever learned
you taught yourself.

Don't think second chance either.
A chance at a second chance means you gave up on the first,
and who wants to trade a maybe win for a possible loss?
You can do better than an at best tie.
Nope.
Sorry,
same chance, just with.......
mmmmmm......
we'll say a unique opportunity to edit.

Your life until now is now your guide for your life.
The impossibility of potential for the past has never been so clear.
Forget regret.
Regret is for mistakes,
and, well.......
fuck if its a mistake until its made twice.
Instead, think.........
lessons in life completed .
(Oh, and just in case you do make a mistake,
don't stress it too much. Now they're just refresher courses.......
come on, summer school can be beneficial)

Probably best if ya toss your so called failures out as well.
Every last one of em.
Failure is only a justified term when supported by a lack of effort.
Besides, you're not even close to finished yet.
Failure?
Ha!!!
All along simply..............
minor increases in a (generously ) minor need for improvement .

You were never really one step behind ya know,
and now..........
one step ahead is just a half step away.
All of the potential that stares blindly at your past
is staring at your future in awe.

It's kinda funny (kinda sad too in a way),
how the most significant aspects of a beautiful life
can be captured almost in their entirety
using three simple words:

Learn.
Love.
Live.

That's it. The rest of your life in three words.

(and if that doesn't make sense just multiply it by three and you'll get it.)

Learn in life.
Love in life.
Live in life.

Know that,
and that half step away becomes three steps back,
while your perfect future becomes future history.

Oh, and by the way,
this was by no means a gift.
You earned it.
All that doubt for nothing.



and if you actually read the whole thing thanks . on a side note, so many great poets here, lotsa respect for all of em. hands down best forum on bluelight. anyways, yeah, done.

 

[Suki_Nova]

I really liked this. It's been one of those days and this has put a smile on my face. Nice work, love it

 

[Shucklak]

its a bit saccarine for my tastes, stylistically speaking, although maybe its all those smiles. Not to mention im incridibly jaded. I can see alot of personality coming through in it though, which is good. I like the minimalist style, but the overall theme would might come through better in stream-of-conciousness. Dont get the wrong idea its not bad at all (far from it), im just trying to offer some constructive criticism, only because you asked for it. Really though, the impression i get of this poem is that is was written by someone on ecstasy, so in the end you got me to smile

 

[cherub]

I life the different style, happiness is not only based on ecstasy, it when the feelings that come through without it that are better somethings great job!