Exhale

[MangoXTC]

Exhale
A tunnel of darkened diamond dancing particles
Travel down a staircase of patterns,
Reaching an impermeable slick
surface displaying the constant moving
picture you perceive as reality.
But that poor ignorant dust will never get there
because of this deceiving wall...
And then…an explosion happens.
Particles split from particles in pandemonium,
Spinning off along their flattened reality,
Groping the limit for an exit, an end.
Patterns of frantic circles fade into the edges
And finally become still.

 

[Asheai]

This is good, I like your choice of words, it's interesting . Anyways, liked your poem and the meaning it gave. Good job, C-ya.
~ Asheai

 

[X-Faktor]

I definitely like this one
It's almost like you're describing the physiology, but also the experience...
Very cool

 

[harraser]