entropy dream

[lilnellierox]

send direct feed...brain bleed
match the rythem with my feet
overwhelmed; past, present and future converge
....time to think again
encroaching on mystery though process
visionaries of "my what a beautiful day"
getting in the way of progress
...no sleep...
...no dream...
...no hope left in pandora's box
down below the atmosphere; mind, body, soul
down so deep it's bio-illuminated
plain you emerge. entombed..
subject to blindness
filth from the river styx
how pretty...
how ugly...
how tame...
am i the exception?
staring at the yellow-electric sky
...something must..be remembered..
but still blistering in the desert.
imperial immortal
check the time..it's late...fuck it...crush it.
take in the pheramones broken dreams exude
such a private thing...
a little thing that screams
i can feel the last notch of revolution
underneath my feet
separating me from every one
as the sun rises in the east
bowing down for contagion
i will not be peopleized
home...
homesick for wild knowing
need to be removed
resubmerged in soul
sickening high to be so low...
yours...?
...mine...?
just the difference in time.
nellie
kinda long for a first

 

[Nietzche]

Very futurist and filled with some of the most vivid but sureal imagery I've encountered. Excellent word choice ("bio-illuminated," "yellow-electric sky," and "take in the pheramones broken dreams exude" are great examples) or in some cases word-creation ("peopleized"). All told, an excellent poem!

 

[lilnellierox]

thank you, glad i came... i think i could stay here for hours reading. i won't be doing alot of writing just because it comes to me a piece (or word) at a time. thanx

 

[Nietzche]

:D Well if you find your writting becomming more prolific you really should post it! I don't respond to every poem I read on here, in fact I am very selective about the poems I actually respond to. Yours definatly impressed me!
Jeffrey