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[EntrenchdMentalist]

$2500 credit is enough for me to get to you
Indecipherable workload hanging me uptight to the spot
Empty transient canisters sustain solicious solitude
transcontinental mental canal transmits daily
what the mental physically requires
Unbroken entity, drowning in disparity, bespoke clarity, bad joke hilarity
church
worship
rapture
envy

abyss
lure
oblivion

 

[(Wordy)]

$2500 credit is enough for me to get to you
Indecipherable workload hanging me uptight to the spot

Love these opening lines! After that I'm not so sure what to make of it (although "what the mental physically requires" is a pretty cool phrase). The one-word lines are very open-ended. Give us more clues, maybe?

 

[EntrenchdMentalist]

I forgot about this. It does kinda trail off, doesn't it? It was written hastily as a gift for the girl who has been taking up all of my attention. I'd say the first six lines is me wanting to go visit her because our internet connection is not enough and the last six lines are pretty much nonsense, which is the extent of my writing ability lately since I've been distracted by her LOL

I reckon it could work out alright with a bit of work. Do I mean the poem or the relationship?

Oh, also, I don't think solicious is really a word. It's at once solacious and solicitous, perhaps? That make sense to me.

 

[(Wordy)]

I guessed the inspiration.

I reckon it could work out alright with a bit of work. Do I mean the poem or the relationship?

I'm guessing both, and I'm hoping so, for your sake. Question is, how much luck has she got in her account?

NB: I figure I've written my best stuff when in love.