Dominion

[ControlDenied]

The Earth
Moments here and there
time appears to move
the earth doesn’t care;
We move
from moment to moment
love appears from the air
Time broke and it bent
We don’t care.
What does one opinion or story
mean to the voiceless sky?
What does dominion and glory
mean to the ear or
to the eye?
Blue is space, green is
grass, gray is
the street, red
is the brick.

 

[ControlDenied]

what a shitty poem!

 

[up all night]

I don't think this is shitty at all but it's not really my style to convince you otherwise.

I think there are some awesome phrases in there. Short and sharp and they're more meaningful each time I read it.

 

[ControlDenied]

Yeh... I kind of just "shot it off"

 

[ControlDenied]

actually it's not so bad now that I think of it
but my opinion changes drastically from moment to moment, much like my mood :S

 

[d-phex]

I'm reading lots of Dostoevsky.. currently, The Idiot.

 

[Jabberwocky]

thanks for sharing this. I think the poem has a lot of potential it gives some good imagery. I would love to see an expanded version of this as for me i enjoy long winded poetry.

 

[ControlDenied]

I agree, I am currently writing an "expanded" poem in a similar style (trying to mix off-the-cuff modern poetry with stylized romanticism)

poetry is all we are, and all I have

 

[ControlDenied]

I just got a warning for saying "What a shitty poem" to my own thread of my own poem.

 

[RareForm]

^no cursing!

i like your style.

 

[ControlDenied]

thank ye, "Cali boy"