Crumble

[Altered_Soul9]

Can you see my world coming down?
All around the screams of hypocritical friends.
The stares of accusing eyes.
The smoke from Satan himself clouds my mind
Smuggling my thoughts.
The knife jabs my back again
Splitting the flesh, chipping the bone, protruding through the muscle
Ending in the heart.
Eyeless souls all around.
Lying, cheating, stealing their way within me.
Breaking me, Killing me.
The screams of hypocritical fiends echo in my mind.
The knife jabs again.
I must move own, I must save my strength.
But I wont.
I've used everything in me just to stand up.
And now I have nothing left to resist with.
Can you see my world coming down?
because if you can't then I will show you.
I shall show you my pain.

My giving in is what set me free....

 

[RareForm]

I don't know what to say...this is sad.

 

[Pantomime7]

Can you see my world coming down?
All around the screams of hypocritical friends.
The stares of accusing eyes.
The smoke from Satan himself clouds my mind
Smuggling my thoughts.
The knife jabs my back again
Splitting the flesh, chipping the bone, protruding through the muscle
Ending in the heart.
Eyeless souls all around.
Lying, cheating, stealing their way within me.
Breaking me, Killing me.
The screams of hypocritical fiends echo in my mind.
The knife jabs again.
I must move own, I must save my strength.
But I wont.
I've used everything in me just to stand up.
And now I have nothing left to resist with.
Can you see my world coming down?
because if you can't then I will show you.
I shall show you my pain.

My giving in is what set me free....

I love this piece. The emotiom is so raw and intense. I feel the pain, suffering, and sadness this piece conveys. Hypocrites linger all around us...... but one thing, could we all be guilty of this sin???

 

[TiberCross]

this is one of my favorite pieces of yours that i've read. i seem to be saying that alot about your work lately. progression is awesome! or maybe i'm just reaching your level. either way i like it alot!

 

[cherub]

definately agree with TC your progression of work is rising to a new level. saddness or not you come so clearly with our words. excellent!