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Confined Mind

Galaxy Rise

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Confined Mind

The underlying reality corrupts your mind for the millionth time
The Other Side has always been a mix of lucidity and lunacy
But you will never know which one is which
How can anyone else verify?
When the insights whispered shall forever remain trapped in your soul?

Delve into the subconscious of those around you
The sudden reflex of the sixth sense
And you think that they think that you think
And you feel that they feel that you feel
It’s all subjective truth of unverified insight
You desperately yearn to know
Is this the insanity of true reality
Or has your reality gone completely insane?

A million trapped thoughts all at once
Visions within that can never be explained even to yourself
Floating around in your internal Cosmos
One luminous vision fluently links on to the next
Sometimes the next is before
Trapped anxiously in a vicious loop of thought
The flowing stream of consciousness
Sometimes scratching the surface to uncover the wires of subconscious
And as you ride the tide of the present
The harmonic horizons of before become lost and unknown.

Capturing elements of the thought but never the thought itself
Even so who is it for but yourself?
Fear of loneliness creates loneliness
The product of thought is only a fraction of all thought
True thought forever imprisoned within
As you remain confined in your mind.

False masks guard your broken soul
Companionship aids but does not heal
For never will anyone ever know you like you do
Your reality will never be known by anyone except you
Universe fine tuned uniquely to you
A uniqueverse is your life.

We all exist confined in our mind
We all just want every word of ours to be revered
Narcissistically seeking to be the Sun of the social solar system
Selfishly blinded by your own light
Oblivious to others trying to shine through
Nobody wishes to be a Planet
Rather to be a star with the influential power of gravitational force
The assertive rays overpower the passive soul
The passive soul becomes confined in their mind.

The white flash of energy flows through all of us
Hope and compassion often elude you
If all humans are confined in their mind
Each trapped within
Then the gray clouds fade away
Allowing for a bright blue day
For our uniqueness is what makes us human
All confined in our mind
All lonely souls
Creates the most radiant unity of all.
 
I like the overall theme of this work, descriptions of the trip mindset. The structure of the poem is similar to the structure of a trip, but one should not simply reach for the profound, but look to describe in beautiful and organic ways... I like to think of poems as paintings, filled with color and movement. So the profound plus an intense and linking description of the world to illustrate the profound theme further.
 
Cheers man! I'm attempting to better my words to be more beautiful and fluent, and I feel some areas I did so nicely. And I like how you relate to it as a trip. I've never done stronger than marijuana - or MDMA if that counts. :)
 
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