Cold Against The Summer Sky

[Free Radical]

Cold against the summer sky
I can't feel what I feel anymore
Life is like a cold foreboding plane
But the light shines through the clouds
In my mind, inside

I want to fly, my broken wings
The pain is unreal
But the air still sings
I'm rising high in the foothills
The mountain pass awaits

 

[Keepit Chill]

"i can't feel what i feel anymore"

thats the line that stood out to me
i like it though, it creates a good image

 

[RareForm]

i can truly relate with this. thank you for posting.
long time no see.

 

[Free Radical]

thanks for the responses. although it's a short poem and it didn't take that long to write, i'm fond of it because i truly felt what i was saying as i wrote it.