Chainsaw of Eternity

[RareForm]

Chain-driven chemical choked madness,
Foully fueled and furious fire fed,
Dire dreams drumming dulled head.
Shotgun salted ire of solemn sullen sadness.

Chainsaw chewing of cardinal Capricorn,
Raging eidetic electrical reason.
Thoughts flailing frantic frisson.
Spinning spitous teeth of Plutonian scorn.

Cut contentions culture, Time crawls crab-wise.
Idled, chainsawed considerations creep,
Desired dreams delve dark and deep.
Seeking solace, slashed senses proffer sighs.

Grimaced, grip the greasy garrulous whine.
Goaded gasoline gains ghastly reap,
Rational reality retreats to sleep.
Above, smoking shadows shroud Saturn's shine.

Into interated infinity, inflamed ideologies race.
Doppler distanced darings probe,
Fevered fancies familiar robe.
Sharply silenced, savaged supposes surrender face.

 

[StuffedTiger]

why do you like big words so much?

I actually would liken this to listening to a chainsaw. Not in a bad way, getting your words to sound like a chainsaw is quite a trick. Is that what you were going for?

 

[RareForm]

I have an extensive vocabulary...

 

[StuffedTiger]

Right, I'm not complaining about your choice of words but I think they're interesting. I would actually liken the tone of this poem to the sound of a chainsaw, is that what you were going for?

 

[katmeow]

I enjoyed the wordplay of this ... very tounge twisterish.

Nice style (like the Cryptosporidium Vernacular piece)... cool stuff!

 

[Pantomime7]

This piec is riveting. I love the way you mold the words together, forming a somewhat, yet very individual, syntax. I love this piece

 

[E-girl]

love the alliteration!

 

[FixXxer]

thats more alliteration than ive ever seen. wow, wish i could do that as well as you did.
good work.

 

[cherub]

RareForm,
I am seeing your work expand and get better and better. As the time you spent in here, reading your work or chatting on occasion i definately say i am intrugied by your mind. It definately been fun to read and find alittle out about you and your mind

 

[RareForm]

^Thanks Cherub.....don't dig too deep...it's scary in there....

::Stuffed Tiger::--I seem to get on the defensive with you and i apologize, you always seem to get me at "that moment" when everything pisses me off...