Cancer

[Sammy_]

Hey, this is my first poem ive posted here. Im not much of a poem writer and just kinda threw this together. To me it seems like it needs more in it, but i dont know. I'd like to hear you're thoughts!

Fuck you for everything you’ve caused
Fuck you for destroying my body
Fuck you for eroding my mind
Fuck you for killing my heart

You came into my life, unnoticed
You caught me frail and you harbored a beast
You saw me naked and abused me
You lied to me

I was selfish until I met you
I was unhappy until I met you
I was dead until I met you
I was nothing until I met you

Thank you

 

[colicolo]

i think u said everything and more in an spectacualy beautiful way

 

[Raz]

I was selfish until I met you
I was unhappy until I met you
I was dead until I met you
I was nothing until I met you

Thank you

Hope we get to see more of your stuff, thanks for posting!

To me, that last bit really makes the whole piece....I like that it can be taken as being earnestly grateful, but also as being really bitter; the ambiguity works well.

 

[Sammy_]

Yay! Im always constantly changing my mind about cancer, i dont know what to believe. I feel either depressed and angry or peaceful and understanding. Haha, peace and understanding have taken a long time to finally get to. A very f**king long time..