broken

[lilygirl]

i wrote the beginning of this and it didn't seem complete, well, he completed it...
stop being mad,you know it consumes me.
stop being sad, you know it's all i see.
self-hate growing like a puddle in a rainstorm.
i can't say what i feel, i merely conform.
i allow you to cause me so much pain
cause one act of kindness makes me whole again.
i let you control how i feel
because your love for me seems so real.
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my eyes tear up, "i don't love you" you say
i told my secret...
my heart's cold again today
just for wishing on a star
and taking kindness a little too far
you saved me and i ruined it
i'm broken
and the pieces will never fit

 

[Robdob]

I love the image of these two lines...
quote:
self-hate growing like a puddle in a rainstorm.
i can't say what i feel, i merely conform.
I'm sorry for your inspiration
but great things have already emerged.

[This message has been edited by Robdob (edited 23 August 2001).]

 

[PureEnlightment]

Nicely written

 

[LilkelPixy]

"you saved me and i ruined it
I'm broken
and the pieces will never fit"
beautiful..something worth quoting.
~Pixy

 

[E-girl]

and think that you and me need to hang out someday and knock some sense into each other.
i am the same way. i let him hurt me over and over and tried to justify taking him back by saying "but then he did this" and it was all better...
in the long run, i was wrong. i know that now. nothing justifies what he did. if you bought me the entire city of Paris tomorrow, it still couldnt make up for the pain he gave all the nights before.
dont let ANYONE control your heart.
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E-girl
IM: tiggersgurl2067
*Choice, not chance, determines destiny*
"November is all I know."

 

[Dagny]

I agree with Robdob here... you have created something beautiful out of your pain. Wonderfully written...
As for being broken and unfixable, I think you are already proving that that is not the case with you.