Break

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

You retaliate, argue,
like for you it's a game, but,
I'm not keeping score, if it's
come to this,
I've lost.

Everything, doesn't
really matter, when the silence
is oppresive, but to think of
breaking it
is worse.

I sit, cradled, confined,
in the comfort of my own arms,
rocking, miserably, hopelessly,
with still hope,
rocking.

And now, even after
everything has fallen, into
place, or into pieces, I still
can't give up
on you.

 

[Chaotic Action Man]

i really like the emotion in this. it gives me strong images, and speaks right to me. perhaps that is because i have just gone through a break up, so ya, speaks right to me. the words are deep and hit home. good job.

 

[doofqueen]

yeah me too, i liked it, i had a strong mix of emotions it it from anger to hurt to feeling lost to feeling hpeful and still being in love ...nice

 

[up all night]

This was nice work.

You retaliate, argue,
like for you it's a game, but,
I'm not keeping score, if it's
come to this,
I've lost.

Oh yeah...

 

[.dR spgeddi]

what star sign are you?

 

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

I'm a libra, and also am a wednesday's child, so I am full of woe...

 

[.dR spgeddi]

i've never known a libra well... so i can expect more of the unexpected!
i knew you werent a taurus or aries by that first stanza!

now here's a little project for ya, and only coz you seem like a good writer. i've been feeling a little down of late and have been scouring this forum for some inspirational and happy words. could you set yourself to write something truely happy but not about love?

 

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

I can do that, easy... I think.

 

[.dR spgeddi]

i am far from easy to please... & i want something really special from you.

 

[Rollingrrl]

And now, even after
everything has fallen, into
place, or into pieces, I still
can't give up
on you.

I hear this somewhere in the vicinty of where my heart should be. Beautiful and strong, great combination. great work man!

~Shelly~