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[Deleted member 10878]

This is what it's like
when a world falls apart
twists and fades
and shatters the heart
Mindlessness and insanity
to those who not understand
it how its like
in this prism of a land

 

[Dagny]

Beautiful.

 

[Deleted member 10878]

another poem the previous sparked tonight..
~ Angel ~
A feather landed on my head,
as my angel almost flew away,
when I looked up, my angel said,
"Never leave me, and I'll always stay."
Emotions ran through my head,
as my angel returned to me,
when I took his hand, my angel said,
"Don't screw up what's meant to be."
A salty tear landed on my head,
as I made my angel cry today,
when I looked up, my angel said,
"I'll always love, in every way."
Confusions of life filled my head,
as Angel took hold of me ,
"Don't give in to what your mind is fed,"
"Remain with me, and forever we'll be free."
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AIM: MoondancerKat
"Dreaming permits each and every one of us to be quietly and safely insane every night of our lives."
~Charles William Dement~

 

[FutureAeons]

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"There is a fifth dimension beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition, and it lies between the pit of man's fears, and the summit of his knowledge. This is the dimension of imagination. It is an area which we call... the twilight zone."

 

[Noodle]

blah indeed

 

[FutureAeons]

*smacks noodle upside the head*
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"There is a fifth dimension beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition, and it lies between the pit of man's fears, and the summit of his knowledge. This is the dimension of imagination. It is an area which we call... the twilight zone."

 

[Noodle]

*reals back in shock*
"...what I do wrong?"
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*tries posting again*
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Wow. This is well written. You have described "blah" perfectly.
Thumb up and stuff.

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*thinks to self*
"...that should come off as a compliment this time for sure. "
"...happy faces are an important visual cue."

 

[Robdob]

Good shit. The first poem is short and sweet, but i had trouble flowing through on the second to last line, maybe punctuation is needed? The second poem is awesome, I loved the angel's words of wisdom.

 

[Noodle]

...prism of a land sticks with me, even though I stumbled over it when my mind first corrected it to "prison" on me mental view screen.
I think it would have been cool to post these seperately too, nnless you had a dyptic in mind. How much time passed between the writing of these two star' ?

 

[Deleted member 10878]

one day== i read that posting requirements thing and it said don't do like 3 different things.. so i just posted my poems in the same topic

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AIM: MoondancerKat
"Dreaming permits each and every one of us to be quietly and safely insane every night of our lives."
~Charles William Dement~