black rose

[vurtomatic]

a petal falls in silent white
in pristine light it floats
as light it alights on
porcelain skin

there she stands, alone
on the bridge spanning
light and dark:
a guide, nothing more
and
everything

death crawls up her arms
in verdant lace
death crawls up her body
a lover’s soft caresses
death crawls up her neck
a shackle of night

an arch of grace, an arch of life
shadowed, a band of midnight
between the river, and the shore
a trinket of silver
dangled in balance

there she smiles, alone
across the gulf that separates
a homecoming
on the quiet air
the sound of her wings

a petal catches the night
a dark seduction
of whispery dreams
of eternal sleep

in the still, in the quiet,
the petal alights
in her shadow, in her embrace
the petal blooms

she is death

she is life eternal

::

and this... is for a star who fell shining and shining still... i hope she finds her way back up to the sky where she belongs

 

[neverwas]

a petal catches the night
a dark seduction
of whispery dreams
of eternal sleep

in the still, in the quiet,
the petal alights
in her shadow, in her embrace
the petal blooms

she is death

she is life eternal

::

and this... is for a star who fell shining and shining still... i hope she finds her way back up to the sky where she belongs

*snuggles* hun thank you for sharing this with me...you know what im going through to some extent and your writting truely touched me...it left me with tears in my eyes

your words are beautiful, i can all to familirise myself with the pain and longing and passion in this... ur style one i love and the structure does it way more than justice.

its perfect

once again a lovely peice to be proud of...thank you for sharing it with me.

vurt: you truely have a talent and i hope one day ur kindness and comfort you show me canbe returned

kel.

 

[haste]

I like this alot Vurt - it has a sense of gothic to it, though I'm not sure if that was your intention.

As always, loved reading your work!

 

[vurtomatic]

I like this alot Vurt - it has a sense of gothic to it, though I'm not sure if that was your intention.

As always, loved reading your work!

thanks haste! i struggled with this piece a bit, but yes, gothic was one of the "feel" i was aiming for i'm glad it comes through.

 

[haste]

It comes through very well, it engrosses the reader with gothic imagery and ambience.

 

[AoiChan ^_^]

oooh it oozes with gothic ambience as haste said... well done

 

[up all night]

You have a truly unique writing style. This piece is perfectly polished and quite delectable (even though the subject matter is depressing).

 

[Cosmic Mist]

kudos vurt! I think many in the "goth community" would enjoy this piece...

That said, it's brilliant. ANd ilove it.

 

[frostyangel]

this gave me the chills...

 

[Rollingrrl]

awesome, some of the best works I think should be a bit haunting. great stuff!

 

[(Wordy)]

I'm reading through some of vurt's old threads... this one struck me as special.

These opening lines cast me into a dream:

a petal falls in silent white
in pristine light it floats
as light it alights on
porcelain skin

... and then a nightmare, vividly captured:

death crawls up her arms
in verdant lace
death crawls up her body
a lover’s soft caresses
death crawls up her neck
a shackle of night