Belt

[breakyaself]

There are a tumbling thousand words
That i breathe
Only to others
(about you)
You saunter
You slowly
Undress
(desired and sexy)
Im fresh
A contridiction
Broken rules
Make no mistake
I am yours
(acknowledgment)

 

[(Wordy)]

I like the form of this, the way it flows as if it's just fallen out of your head, with the short lines, the parentheses... the kind of thought-stream which points to the fact that there's always more going on than there appears (which I'm sure is also true of this poem).

 

[raverchik]

Short and sweet

 

[exoiced]

i like the (acknowledgment) on the end
it's a good finish to a refreshing piece

 

[colicolo]

straight to the point without leaving anything important out