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Dagny

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Give up a thing
for the benefit
of a person -
call it respect or maybe
you're afraid that not
giving exactly
what is needed might
diminish how
important
a person is to you
when it's 2 a.m.
and in your lonely bed all you've got
is that you know
exactly what to do
and say so that
one person
understands that you are strong
enough to give up
a thing
and be needed
when it counts most.

When that thing,
you've given it up and
now get to be the
selfless one
(how lovely it is
to be so for
a person you respect),
when that thing is
love
then in your lonely bed all you've got
is a surety
of one person
and a you that
won't be yours
after all.


The thought finished at a seemingly perfect time,
as the end of a cigarette found its way to an earth
of concrete, at rest among good intentions living
in hearts across the sea of humanity nearby.
She walked again towards a door, then through it to
where that nice waitress had finally brought the drinks
and a friend told a joke she hadn't the heart to say
had been heard a hundred times before.
As long as there is laughter.
 
I enjoyed reading this, but for some reason my mind is reading darkness into it. Overall the theme is based on being selfless...but are you ok with that? I love it when you make my brain wonder. I read this a few different times because it has a mysterious air to it.
Good work :)
 
The thought finished at a seemingly perfect time,
as the end of a cigarette found its way to an earth
of concrete, at rest among good intentions living
in hearts across the sea of humanity nearby.
She walked again towards a door, then through it to
where that nice waitress had finally brought the drinks
and a friend told a joke she hadn't the heart to say
had been heard a hundred times before.
As long as there is laughter.

this reminded me on an Ani song...

I love it babe..
 
^^^^^^^^^^

Yeppers dagny, the last stanza makes the poem . . . such a dramatic change of pace. :-D /me smokes ciggy now
 
When that thing,
you've given it up and
now get to be the
selfless one
(how lovely it is
to be so for
a person you respect),
when that thing is
love
then in your lonely bed all you've got
is a surety
of one person
and a you that
won't be yours
after all.[/B]

Girl only you know how much this hits home to me
 
Dagny said:

When that thing,
you've given it up and
now get to be the
selfless one
(how lovely it is
to be so for
a person you respect),
when that thing is
love

*sighs* i myself needed to hear something like this today to :) a great bump :)

i loved it.
 
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