Antisocial Butterfly (please critique)

[jameslovesyou]

i am an anti-social butterfly
with a propensity for intensity
...a most sincere desire
to cut to the fucking chase
i seldom want to talk
about the weather
and i hate sports
i wish to get to the heart...
to why we are here
and why you and i have found each other
and what the fuck we are to do
because i believe
there is prupose to all of this
how could it be any other way?
i mean
why would i want to continue
to breath
if there
is no
point.

© Thebain

 

[enoughorangejuice?]

i wish i knew my purpose.... excellent poem

 

[Herbmaster 5000]

i am an anti-social butterfly
with a propensity for intensity
...a most sincere desire
to cut to the fucking chase
i seldom want to talk
about the weather
and i hate sports
i wish to get to the heart...
to why we are here
and why you and i have found each other
and what the fuck we are to do
because i believe
there is prupose to all of this
how could it be any other way?
i mean
why would i want to continue
to breath
if there
is no
point.

© Thebain

dumb and clitche

 

[exoiced]

I like the theme. I like the questioning and destiny. Not bad.

 

[Raz]

i wish to get to the heart...
to why we are here

Me too.

I like that you think about this stuff.