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Shnouzerpuff

Shnouzerpuff

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Sometimes
I shut my eyes so damn tightly
focus on the network of colour and pattern
use my imagination to weave a perfect story

It is then I wonder
Just what it is you see in me
you are
so smartprettydelicateuniqueenthrallingfascinating
and I am...

well.

me.

And when I breathe out
breathe out and relax.
I slowly exhale and begin to open my eyes

Open them as much as I dare to.

Vision sharply being rendered to a crisp focus
I see that shine in those enchanting emerald eyes
I notice the way your fringe moves oh so slightly to the left
All the cliche's happen at once.
my heart skips a beat
my mouth goes dry


Sometimes I regret this situation
the lack of control is unsettling. unnerving.
The thought of being so damn vulnerable
You have my heart dammit.

Fuck! you have my heart. Dammit. Fuck.

Fuck.

I think I love you.
 
i like it, well written.

i enjoyed this part most:

"It is then I wonder
Just what it is you see in me
you are
so smartprettydelicateuniqueenthrallingfascinating
and I am...

well.

me."

:) (and congrats on falling in love!!)
 
I like a lot, the part quoted twice above is awesome, its strange how me-me rhyme really works as the rithm carrier. Phat write!

and as above i think congrats are in order ;)




skjalff
 
I liked the honesty juxtaposed with introspective thoughts

:)
 
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thanks so much guys :)

I just tried to capture my thoughts as accurately as possible and I am amazed they sort of worked out in anything even remotely semi-coherent.

I don't know yet if I will show her - any of my random scribblings are usually just posted on bluelight and never seen by anyone else.

but thanks again anyone who read it :)
 
this blew me away, it was written perfectly, you captured "my" thoughts pretty accurately :)

Thanks for sharing!
 
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