accepting the substitution:

[IhaveNoLegs]

accepting the substitution:

Ambeinces' manipulation through organized fractures,

how acknowledgement of the process

can startle currents,

untraceable reactions foretell nothing,

the spasms insquential nonrelated,

satisfy not of corelation of multiples

or begin to

explain explicit ecstatic empathy the biproduct





My first shot at poetry. i could use some input. is it too something? (literal or sloppy?)

 

[katmeow]

A little more abstract than what I like to read, I don't really get the meaning of it?!?

Feels a little like you are trying too hard to throw in big words.

(But that's just my take, don't let it deter you )

 

[-|Twiztd|-]

^I agree: But the ideas are good:

 

[IhaveNoLegs]

lol the big words might have to do with the rolling at the time.

 

[cherub]

hehe rolling and typing,,,, then i am very impressed,,,,,,, i don't think i could put together a sentence while rolling though deep thoughts were there, just not the rest of me

so excellent work