Song I wrote but not sure about. Constructive criticism needed, haven't written a song in well over five years now, just been playing all my old ones.
Edit: Fucked up the title... Sorry.
Edit #2: Fixed another thing I don't remember now.
Edit #3: Spelled dilated right.
AND FINALLY EDIT #5: The song is about everything I think about and have thought about, and it's all summarizing a thoughts journal I recently found while actually cleaning my house. The journal was written on a two-week "adventure" in New Mexico.
Doing this calmly.. Edit #6: I also apologize for the fact that I didn't see the words forum and wasn't able to put it in the lyrical thread.
You're such a sinner
Sin enough to be a winner
You make your mark
And make your mind a little thinner
As black as what you have
You choose to be a loser
You realize you're both
Accused and the accuser
In my reflective nomenclature
Dilated supernature
Superhuman on his knees
What he finds, he just believes
What you doubt you start to fear
Singing bullets drawing near
This hell made was made for me
Cut the words and make me free
Desatisfy your need
With simple education
A funny way to make
A day of elevation
I want to show myself
It fits destructive reason
My time here limited
But far from out of season
In my reflective nomenclature
Dilated supernature
Superhuman on his knees
What he finds, he just believes
What you doubt you start to fear
Singing bullets drawing near
This hell made was made for me
Cut the words and make me free
The pseudo human fails
Prevails: the rich diseases
He calls himself a God
Does nothing that he pleases
The pseudo human fails
Prevails: the rich diseases
He calls himself a God
Does nothing that he pleases
--mic
Edit: Fucked up the title... Sorry.
Edit #2: Fixed another thing I don't remember now.
Edit #3: Spelled dilated right.
AND FINALLY EDIT #5: The song is about everything I think about and have thought about, and it's all summarizing a thoughts journal I recently found while actually cleaning my house. The journal was written on a two-week "adventure" in New Mexico.
Doing this calmly.. Edit #6: I also apologize for the fact that I didn't see the words forum and wasn't able to put it in the lyrical thread.
You're such a sinner
Sin enough to be a winner
You make your mark
And make your mind a little thinner
As black as what you have
You choose to be a loser
You realize you're both
Accused and the accuser
In my reflective nomenclature
Dilated supernature
Superhuman on his knees
What he finds, he just believes
What you doubt you start to fear
Singing bullets drawing near
This hell made was made for me
Cut the words and make me free
Desatisfy your need
With simple education
A funny way to make
A day of elevation
I want to show myself
It fits destructive reason
My time here limited
But far from out of season
In my reflective nomenclature
Dilated supernature
Superhuman on his knees
What he finds, he just believes
What you doubt you start to fear
Singing bullets drawing near
This hell made was made for me
Cut the words and make me free
The pseudo human fails
Prevails: the rich diseases
He calls himself a God
Does nothing that he pleases
The pseudo human fails
Prevails: the rich diseases
He calls himself a God
Does nothing that he pleases
--mic
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