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A comedown

Urbain

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Wow. This is the very first time i've wandered over and posted in a new forum; over than EADD. Happy to meet you all. :)

I penned this a few days ago and just caught sight of this forum so thought i would post.

Comments, Opinions, Bias, Judgements, or Complaints, are very welcome :)



(Written immedietly after a dream, usually when im at my most and only creative)



A Comedown​


You gave an overwhelming sense of pleasure.
I was in love with the world. You turned Monday into Friday, and I danced to your alluring chemical embrace coursing through my veins. Together, we admired the universe and you handed me wild desires of freedom at a price. I analysed my own existence with such sweet empathy. We talked intimately for hours, my silence personified and contently introverted.

The warmth has left me now.
I feel an empty insignificance in a busy World, surrounded by a stark realisation of falsehood. Facing the aftermath, in my conscious dreams, I see you sit and stare at me, conjuring wicked intentions with a sneer on your distorted face. I wait patiently, only with sound knowledge and experience that you will fade as quickly as you appeared.

Never before has a lesson been taught with a vivid outcome of consequence. I’m only glad I have suffered to have learnt.







Urbain.(Not real name) © April 2009.
 
Reminds me of heroin, the warmth and how without it experiencing that feeling of an "empty insignificance in a busy World". Well written, I enjoyed this very much.
 
I think anyone with any experience with this topic would know what you were talking about, which is good imagery, because it's never actally said in the peom.
 
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