8 items or less

[Strawberry_lovemuffin]

They shuffle in supermarket queues,

clutching their dissapointments
to their chests;
8 items or less

Faces blank
Purposes unknown

Slowly he turns back around
Liquid chocolate eyes

Takes in my tzatzki, my corn chips

As I register his milk, his raisin bread

And we shuffle... just barely...
past Nicole Richie and Micsha but he

stops... and for a minute I think he sees me

But the hum of it all

dissects humanity

 

[Caroline]

NICE.
mmm, i cant explain how well that resonated with the song i'm currently listening to (drug store by Melt-banana), in my mind atleast.

"But the hum of it all

dissects humanity" - got me in the back of my neck.

 

[katmeow]

Nice capture.

I like how you've played around with the spacing too.

 

[(Wordy)]

'Capture' is the right word... a convincing slice of life. And it sounds wonderful - you have an ear for cadence.

 

[New]

That was cool.

Moments deserve to be captured, even without a camera.

 

[colicolo]

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