7 arrows <<:welcome=comments/critiques/alterations:>>

[skjalff]

7 arrows

i sent seven black arrows
to find seven black hearts

i sent them to seven winds
into the night sky

forged in anger and grief
for seven friends lost

forged in my seven tears
for each blood drop

black as old hatred
they left my bow

seven as one
into the clouds they dove

six returned red
to the quiver at morn

and the seventh came black
for me... Heart blackest of all



these are lyrics for a song i'm making, any suggestions and ideas are much appreciated..

skjalff

 

[jaymie]

oh that is cool. I especially like the ending. It made my eyes go big. I don't have any suggestions, though it has a very nice flow.

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

very cool. it took me away. yay! keep it up!

 

[i_enjoy_ecstasy]

yet another nice one skjalff :D

 

[drEaMtiMe*@#]

a really really like the arrow idea. very interesting concept

 

[DarkPoet]

great story, I'd love to hear it set to music, very interesting indeed