11.23.06 The Past

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11.23.06 Photographs

I want to sit in a room where
the walls are very green.
I will stay completely still
for no reason at all.
When I stand silent
orchestral music should
well up behind me.
Spotlights will illuminate me at
varying times of the day
and the night.

Leaves falling in the sunlight
A blue couch, a red chair
yellow flowers in a clear vase.

I will walk down long hallways in
short dresses.
Wear dark clothing and
red lipstick.
My three thousand mile bus rides
will always end in reunions:
childhood bedrooms
reclasping of hands.
I will lean on glass counters
Hear loud music in small bars
See headlights on green grass.
You will deliver a single rose
in a long thin box.
Red hair, green wall.
I will smile sadly.

 

[(Wordy)]

This is incredible... one of the best things I've ever read in Words.

So many sensory, tangible threads of life, fragments of future which are visible, close, haunting.

You should definitely consider submitting this for publication.

 

[Tronica]

even i could actually see this... and that's something for me! perhaps it's because the images are familiar to me too...

well done

 

[up all night]

Amazing. You are just amazing.

 

[spinkle]

You should definitely consider submitting this for publication.

I absolutely agree with this BUT I have a small critique.

Drop "and think fondly of the past." Excellent work, love.

 

[(Wordy)]

Yeah, good call - I agree with that suggestion. The ending is sharper without it.

 

[katmeow]

I wish you posted more often. Your work still inspires