“Placing the Pieces” 2.250 words, first draft... Any critique appreciated.

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

Okay, I can't actually post this story in here as it has tabs that are crucial to the story. If you want oto assist me with this piece, email me at [email protected], I will send you a copy that has to be opened in word, cheers.

 

[atomic*girl*23]

i might be able to help you out. send it to me (virus free please) to [email protected] i hope it's not tooo long...