you and i

[syke]

i                            you
wear                      close
a mask                   your eyes
that                       yet
no one sees            see through lies
but                         while
me                         blind
i                            you
speak                     hear
the truth                 nothing
yet                         but
the world                 does not
clamour                   stop you
for lies                    judging
            you are open
             i am close
        while my heart bleeds
            yours grows
[ 10 September 2002: Message edited by: syke ]

 

[punch e punch]

This is a pretty cool piece of writing!
I like the effect of the those verses running parallel to each other, like side-by-side people who interact in the last verse.

 

[SuperPoopey]

thats awesome!!!

 

[plazma]

Definately one of the most interesting poems I've read in the last few months. I'm rating this one a 9 out of 10, its damn thought provoking and VERY interestingly put.
Fucking nice job syke!
-plaz out-