what's wrong buddy?

[.dR spgeddi]

if i said there was something wrong
could you accept nothing could be wrong
except that, that, that might be wrong
is at a depth you have not been invited on
for a reason?

it may not be initially clear to you why
when you think that youre so near to me that i
should have very little to keep from you might i
be just protecting you
from a side of me you needn't knoo
to love me?

 

[neverwas]

mmm...i had to read this twice to wrap it round my tounge.

i liked the flow and the way you have worded this. it is full of questions but yet ones to which the answer is already known.

nice work

 

[Raz]

I think this is a really great representation of that side of us which chooses to carry pain so that we don't have to burden the ones we love with it...which I've been thinking about a bit lately anyway, so maybe that's just projection on my part.

Anyways, well done dude.

--Raz--

 

[chrissy]

beautiful and so true... at first, i sorta sided with the whole factor of hating it when ppl always ask me, continuously too, what's wrong when really, all i need is my own time to myself...
beautiful absolutely beautiful and i have felt like this many many times before. i love ur stuff

chrissy