Vanity's Pledge

[LostProphecy]

"Oh, Prophet of Beauty,
let Feast take it's hold.
Let body and tenor,
prove withered and sold.
To a faith that's unyielding
and impotent goals,
I sacrifice this body,
these futures,
our souls."

 

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

Nice use of stanzas, I liked it but I'm not sure why, maybe because it was short and sweet yet screamed epic history?

 

[TiberCross]

you knew i would like this. the syncopation of sentences chock full of bold statements really make this one jump out at ya'.

 

[RareForm]

i like this. good stuff

 

[cherub]

for such a short piece, strong works

great work !

 

[LostProphecy]

Thank you all...

 

[Altered_Soul9]

Nice, short but well written

 

[neverwas]

sounded very SHakespeary nice.

 

[StuffedTiger]

it's very nice of you to post these on bluelight.

 

[LostProphecy]

I recently attended an open mic night at a hip local art store. I need motivation. BUMP^

 

[froggygirl]

I like it.. short, but nice..

 

[RareForm]

I recently attended an open mic night at a hip local art store. I need motivation. BUMP^

motivation i would understand as being for lesser writers, you are a great writer....end of story.

 

[StuffedTiger]

I was totally thinking of you today, LostProphecy. about how I hadn't seen you post anything new in a while...