Untie The Knots Gently

[Dekloren]

Untie the knots gently
Inhale deeply
You turn the corner but your shadow lingers
It's all happening again but this time in reverse

Untie the knots gently
Pull them apart inch by inch
It's just a game mentally
Numbness turns it into an itch

Untie the knots gently
It was all too hard before
I'm standing on the dock, you're leaving the shore
This time I won't be so empty.

 

[froggygirl]

Pretty...

 

[skjalff]

beautifully written! very thoughtful and smooth.. I tried reading it in a different order, like "Untie the knots gently" then the 2nd line of first stanza, then 2nd of second, then 2nd of third, then again "Untie the knots gently" then 3rd line of 1st stanza, 3rd line of 2nd etc.. it seems confusing to me now, if you dont mind:


<<
Untie the knots gently
Inhale deeply
Pull them apart inch by inch
It was all too hard before

Untie the knots gently
You turn the corner but your shadow lingers
It's just a game mentally
I'm standing on the dock, you're leaving the shore

Untie the knots gently
It's all happening again but this time in reverse
Numbness turns it into an itch
This time I won't be so empty.
>>

The lines taken separately are beautiful and rearranging them totally keeps the meaning, just introduces a different perspective, i totally loved it. its like the poem is assembled from autonomous images that when together convey one specific feeling and imagery regardless of order. Or maybe it just seems like that to me, in which case i am super sorry.

again great work!

[[ Please tell me if you want me to take down the rearranged lines, i'll remove it immediately]]



skjalff

 

[cherub]

I love this, So smooth and serene can't help but want to relate it to love.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Such a lovely feel to it!

 

[boulderonshoulder]

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