Unconditional

[kirkyturkey]

Always my sweet lover in the morning;

Always understanding;

Always forgiving.

You will never hurt me,

Or betray me.

I lie in your arms,

masked by your all encompassing protection.

I throw my head back in abandon,

and you catch me with marshmallow muscles.

I will never leave you,

You will never betray me,

For as long as my devotion lasts.

 

[cLOUDDEAD]

i really like this. it appears saturated with simplicity, and bluntness, but it weighs heavily in it's subtlety. i'm not sure if i should take it ambiguously or literally. i can't help but laugh at the "marshmallow muscles" part. it was a nice touch, a dash of comical imagery amidst the romanticism. well done!

 

[kirkyturkey]

Thanks for your comments. cLOUD DEAD. Proper bigged me up!
It's about my love affair with codeine. Ambiguity a bonus. Been checking your stuff.

 

[PhenethylTrypta]

I enjoy minimalist work. At first I was reveling in the beautiful idea of a lover, I myself lost my lover of six years in exchange for, well, let's not go there, but I was vicariously enjoying the comfort of the loyal lover. But then I saw that it was about codeine, which doesn't ruin it for me first, because I am an opiophile, the euphemism for junkie for dope addict, though codeine is ineffective for me (I lack the CYP2D6 enzyme), so I equate opiates with loyal lovers as well and second it doesn't ruin it for me because even though you have revealed your own meaning I can take from it my own interpretation. However, I would advice that you refrain from explicating too much detail as to what your work is about. It limits the imaginations of your readers. Good poem nonetheless.