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"To a Platform Up High"

wastedwalrus

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“To a Platform Up High”



She walked bare on the dirt and grass

And led me through a shaded pass.

She eloquently climbed each stair

As wind whispered against her hair.


Finally, we paused

On the platform up high,

Then drew a deep breath

And we stared to the sky.​
 
You're really feeling this love thing hard, aren't you?

It's coming through your poetry quite clearly.:)
 
Haha what can I say... I'm a hopeless romantic.

I just hope it's coming through GOOD poetry ;)
 
bleh. i know walrus personally (mods) so i dont think hed take this the wrong way.

that is sappy as hell man. its a good letter to give HER, but as far as poetic value goes? :p
 
It is what it is, I don't take your opinions personally and yes, mods, his opinion is welcome. It's a description of an actual event and it was one that I found to be so particularly profound, I was compelled to write about it in detail. I had second thoughts about posting this poem (I wrote it almost a month ago) but I just figured I'd give it a shot... kind of knew it was a piece of shit already ;).
 
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