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drea

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Last week I buried my toes in the sand
I caught a burn on my cheeks,
I caught a thought of you in my mind.
Equitable in temperature.
A hurtful burn, a sick soured sand,
You abrasive, scorching little thought.
Last week I saw your eyes in the water.
A wave splash on my feet
Procured my own saltwater,
From my eyes to the thought of yours,
An equitable transparent promise.
And maybe I really can see right through you?
No fool, I knew what words you’d whisper.
You’d blister me in a verbal ultraviolet
Just to get me there.
To get me
There.
It’s so fucking hot in here….
In my air conditioned home,
In my icewater hands,
With your pesky burning thought
Ripping lava through my head.
Every you leaves me a new kind of empty.
And every night leaves me an old kind of full.
Full of wishing, devoid of result.
You spin me in waves,
A tidal love,
And I’m in and out with the moon.
It should figure,
You only ever held me at night anyway.
And in turn, I’m magnetized to your motion,
Out in the morning, back before dusk,
Circling the earth just to lap you up,
For a night.
You’re a fools cradle, with your darkened sand,
Rocking my head to the sound of the waters
No one can see you here.
And now I’m pretty sure
You haven’t seen me either.
 
I respond to few threads here but I have been for quite a while been a big fan of your writing. You present matters in the most simple and honest manner and do so it a beautiful and riveting way.
I truly appreciate your talent.
 
hey drea,
I'm impressed as usual. Check out the most recent Columbia Poetry Review from Columbia College in Chicago--should be available at Borders, Barnes and Noble, etc...I think your style(s) would be a good fit there. They accept submissions starting in August.
Cheers.
 
Astonishing, sweetie. You've captured an entire relationship in so few words, with none of the messy details required. There are few people in the world who can take a moment and make it poetry (or vice-versa)... you are definitely one of those gifted people. Thank you for writing.
 
beautiful
but i still wonder , is this ever going to stop, my concern for your posts? why does this make me feel so much ,so much ....
i some how can see myself there someday , thinking the same ways , about the same person , and yet i dont want to know you still think, at all about this, but i know you do .. from all ive read, so all i can do is understand , and accept, and go on, hopeing my emotions can be supressed and i can be ok with you , and maybee even more,
i would like to ignore*
 
christal,
i wouldnt be so quick to assume that this particular poem is about him...it (along with alot of other things ive written) are about a different person.
i shouldnt be a threat to you, you are a beautiful girl and im sure you have alot to offer.
im a very different person from when i was with him (a much better one, i think), and anything i have written about him in recent times has been a reflection of that, and how i believe that him leaving me was quite possibly the best thing that could have ever happened to me.
i cant say im going to censor myself in this forum, regardless of the sensitivity of the issue, and i really hope you dont either.
i cant beleive i just got this personal on a message board, but so be it.
i wish you well, and hopefully this has cleared things up a bit.
~andrea
 
hmm , that was embarassing....
i guess i dont care about getting embarassed here no one really knows me here and anyone that may have met me probably already has there preconcieved notions
i am sorry for misunderstanding,,,,
or maybee you do know whats gone on in our relationship, its sent me into a paraniod frenzy ....
anyway i didnt mean to be offensive to you i just like to be honest, and honestly i really like your writting more than anyones poetry ive ever read, and i write constantly more than i breath i think,,, so reading is unusual for me
so i guess its just hard for me and my nosy self to pass up something of yours, because all your stuff is great... but i also cant help but wonder about some who you are refering to so my heart sinks a little , sorry if i seem like im imature , because im not, ive just had a way to many bad experiences , four to many . I hope that you can forgive my foolishness and not think that i dont like you , because its not that at all , its just a bit akward for me, as im sure it is for you ,,,, but anyway yeah sorry!
 
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