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[StuffedTiger]

love is the light of the world
you can see it more clearly at night
in the darkness
glowing

 

[ButrosButros_Grantos]

^^Not sure about the 3rd line of this, after all it's redundant. If it's night, of course it's going to be dark?

 

[StuffedTiger]

love is the light of the world
you can see it more clearly at night
glowing

do I get a cookie?

 

[FixXxer]

i like the 3rd line actually.. gives it some sort of touch..

nice short, simple poem.

 

[StuffedTiger]

thanks.

 

[RareForm]

I liked it pretty good, short and sweet....

 

[neverwas]

tis short and still nice

 

[FixXxer]

i thought about it.. and i vote that you keep the 3rd line..
sure, its obviosu that at night its dark.. but including that line, makes you think about what you are trying to say much more. Again, very well done

 

[StuffedTiger]

^yeah I totally agree. I just reposted the poem minus the third line to show how silly I thought the idea of removing it was....

But this gives me the opportunity to go on a tangent. I put art into two types of categories: art that thinks for you and art that forces you to think.

'Love is the light of the world you can see it more clearly at night glowing.' - This poem (sentence really) thinks for you. You really don't have to use your own mind at all because it tells you how it is.

The original version, however, forces you use your own mind and create your own imagery otherwise it's really rather annoying.

This is a new idea for me so I can't articulate it very well.

I thought of this idea after seeing Harry Potter 3 yesterday (which kicked ass) and then reading reviews by ebert et all which preferred the first two movies which I thought were fun but pretty mindless.

 

[jaxon]

agree, but i wouldnt judge either side as better or worse. sometimes i just wanna see whats inside another mind, sometimes i want to change whats inside of mine.

is love the light of the world
in the darkness
glowing ?




since its been quite picked apart by now i dared rearrange it, truly liked the original thou.

 

[FixXxer]

my vote still goes to the original as well

 

[neverwas]

bump back to the top

 

[StuffedTiger]

bump