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The voice you never hear.

Altered_Soul9

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A drop of blood trickles down to settle on your heart.
A flat eye creeps open to break your trust.
The lion's roar grows faint with time.
Inside you feel lost.
Outside you feel forgotten.

Traveling to meet no one,
On barren roads which lead to nowhere.
Your neck hurts from all the screams.
Yet no one heard you say anything.
No one knocks, No one calls.

Living in this post apocalyptic world...
Life and love lay in ruins.
Everyone is nowhere.
The sweet melodic sound of your soul,
Its evolved into a careless pounding on the back of your skull.
Frightened and alone you cry.
The blue tears fall slowly to the earth's raped surface.
......
Mother Nature bleeds another tear.
Father Time retires to dwell within his clock.
The holy can not help you now.
But I can............

Come here my son and let me brand you with my love...
 
This piece is strong; I love the way your words flow together. The ending is one of my favorite sections; I do believe that you are talking about Lucifer. Awesome writing....Mad Props!
 
This is awesome, i would have thought "apocalypsis" even if you didnt you the actual word in the poem :)) Great write!

Traveling to meet no one,
On barren roads which lead to nowhere.
Your neck hurts from all the screams.
Yet no one heard you say anything.
No one knocks, No one calls.

I loved this paragraph.. No one knocks no one calls

LostProphecy: i think that unless there is someone who knows EVERY corner of our mind and yet leaves us feeling unviolated, we all are SCREAMING lonely
 
YES!!

Powerful stuff! Love the feeling that runs with it - I really njoyed this one. The "enticement" of the last line ends it so perfectly. I think this is the best one of your poems I have read!
 
LostProphecy said:
Are you lonely?

Wow, this came out way wrong. I DID enjoy this piece. Your stuff gets better and better, with time. I would like to talk with you, more, about your writing. You should hit me up sometime, el duderino.

JB
 
WOW. I haven't been on here in a while and this was the first piece I read tonight. Powerful. I miss your stuff. I miss talkin to ya. Great job!
 
Re: Re: The voice you never hear.

RareForm said:
This is a very interesting concept to say the least -- you really are getting better from your first few poems that i read of yours -- maybe we both were wrong with our assertions -- maybe we should conform -- if you know what i'm speaking of....

nice poem, really.

~Drew

I couldn't agree with you more. I believe it would be in the best interest of the forum and we would be doing them an injustice if we didn't ;)
 
^^^^ comformity is not always the answer but sometimes we have to get by to be at a place where our morals are not compromised. Great stuff, powerful as always. :)
 
Mother Nature bleeds another tear.
Father Time retires to dwell within his clock.
The holy can not help you now.
But I can............

Come here my son and let me brand you with my love...

This was a great write. I enjoyed it alot. But the part up here at the top was an awsome ending.
 
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