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The violence of eroticism AND Waiting for Dessert (first 2 pieces of prose- short)

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I had a wet dream inside a nightmare hours after I had closed my eyes and the coffin had ceased to allow any more light in. A slut..A super vixen that could cultivate the highest level of erotic allure. Her sex appeal, though trashy, was the incarnate of a myth that resonates through vortexes of time and space, from the subconscious to supernal. She aroused minds and engorged many of organs, until one fateful morning I sat feeding pigeons cyanide rice and noticed a corpse curled in a corner where two office buildings joined. I waltzed across the street making sure to stop and twirl so I could smile at the driver who just slammed on his brakes to keep from ruffling my fine suit. The collection of flesh seemed familiar and a reminiscent scent of semen was in the air. Her chest no longer heaving as I once saw it do..as a matter of fact this adolescent wasn't breathing at all. And as i woke from this realm with a staff filled with morning blood, this is what I wrote:
cuts do deep she could have been hung on meat hooks
chicken wire barbed wire strain marks on her wrist and neck
she has thicker-than-snot-lashed-eyes
Polly hasn't had a cracker in a month and it shows
roof of her mouth must feel like a fetus rib cage
a forehead canon crevice due from stress and worry
her skin fades in and out in static aquas and violets
veins surrounded by an army of puncture wounds..
Visible garters..left one not connected..
The fishnets ripped as a milky fluid lies on her thigh
and she just lays here on the street decomposing
a sideshow for all passersby
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I had yet another dream...that took place weeks before this lonesome character, I have thrown myself into, found this girl's body. It was him staring over her body..Remembering the first time he had met her. Before her involvement in drugs, extreme S&M, prostitution, and the whole lifestyle..He aided her in with an introduction to such a world.
The Innocent Fetish of an Eccentric
The stage is set, lights dimmed. The audience well lubricated by their fermented liquid, most preferably in martini glasses with each individual's preference of however many olives they want. I myself feel nature calling, now whether that's due to alcohol consumption or the anticipation of the show about to start, I cannot tell. But I'd tolerate the texture of a soaked pinstriped pants and the scent of my urine lingering in the air with the likes of my fluttering cigarette smoke and the gypsy incense burning throughout the joint, if it meant I would not miss a second of the upcoming display. I squirm in my seat to readjust like a child in a pew on Sunday morning with better things to do.
And finally, that velvet cake curtain is drawn back and the spotlight drops down to reveal the icing. A voluptuous too-young-to-know-better-buxom-bombshell-blond. The band I know is attempting a dramatic classical introduction, just to roll into today's modern sound of the new Negro jazz, but I care not for what is audible at this junction. Tonight I give praise to the gods for the gift of sight. Slowly, and sloppily seductively, the new coming wanna be vaudeville dancer breaching into this underworld of the burlesque and grotesque begins her dance/act. To aid my displeasure with a rotten start, the pace quickens and her struts, trots, and strides grow more fluid and natural. With every turn, bend, and presentation of flexibility I fathom the various positions she could be slaved into with the fear of pain.
Something is innocent about her, I notice, as she removes layer after layer of her excess extravagant get-up. Down to satin gloves, pasties, stockings, and a petticoat (that is shed within another 2 minutes). Intriguing how a feminine character can stimulate a psyche by her every movement, revealing a personality that lies somewhere between feathers and leather. The glamorous glitter blinds like diamonds capturing an eclipse, a holy light refracting off those one-day-will-lactate-mammaries.
She swings by tables making dates be more watchful of their men as she fogs their bi-focals and loosens their ties, while some of the wives and accompanying courtesans secretly touch themselves and blush til their cheeks matches their rouge in a bi-sexual shame. Kicking her legs in patterned out numbers. Legs. Legs that only age can make that refined. Legs only youth can vouch for their flawlessness.
As this Shirley Temple dominatrix, (or Betty Page virgin- whichever way you see it), gallops her heals and lashes in my direction. I, yet again, squirm in my seat. But not out of a need for restroom facilities. With one deep inhale off a cigarette and a martini moistening my throat, I reclaim my demonically demure composure. Her buttocks propped up on my table, her lashes flutter, and wanton lips pout and part. This innocent little girl has already mastered the marketing tease of a bordello resident. A professional magnet apt in stimulating an organ with a rush of blood, oxygen, and alcohol that is the most difficult to erotically errect..my mind.
She drops a card in my coat pocket with a kiss on the cheek and a brush of cleavage, and I, a piece of currency in her stockings. She turns, and in a ballet step, dances backs to the stage. She takes her bows and at last, the curtain drops. The audience, horny and excited, give a bar-room bred with an opera concert applause and make their exodus in couples in the mood for copulating and singles knowing baby oil is in their near future.
I glance at the card and in a schoolgirl script, a phone number is listed. With more than a shroud of doubt that this maidenhead could actually want to be deflowered by a sexual deviant such as I. Standing, straightening my suit, tossing my top hat back on and with cane in hand, I begin the stroll home. Lethargic and ready for bed, I tip toe down these New Orleans’s streets wondering if I could be this dove's incubus or her my succubus. Cracking a smile, I finally let my bladder release down my leg, and finish my walk home in high spirits. Joyous with the knowledge that by next nightfall I may have plowed something sacred. That I, this Pope of fashion and etiquette, will find a release in ravishing skin that is a neo-milky-Victorian crème and bloodying such beautiful entrails.
[ 11 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
 
Waiting for Dessert
Back a couple of moons, when my hair follicles were choking in blue paint, a feline friend flew in from a land of chopsticks, electronics, and nuclear war to pay me a visit. Little did I know that we both were yearning for attention anyway we could get it. So without disgrace..without pride, we both had our dates set to soil sheets. A few nights of this skipped like a record and before you knew it, we were in love. But I didn’t have the balls (nor her the ovaries) to fucken do anything but plead the 5th. She departed on her first class air ferry back to Japan and for the first time in over a year, I dropped my obnoxious attitude and my punk 101 value shield, and cried.
We weren’t gonna continue. There’s no way in a Hitler’s Hell, right? I think we both drank too much. How was this return visitor to alcoholism supposed to fathom that my search for attention and mis-led adventures would allow me to trip, stumble, fall, scrape my knee, and crush both my ankles in a pit of love? I mean, she was just supposed to be another piece of wild game in my court; and now all of a sudden I’m writing her poems about erotic silhouette shadows moving in candlelight? Yup, that’s how it went, more or less.
So months pass, and on the turn of another Chinese year-of-some-dumb-ready-to-be-eaten-by-the-poor animal, a Christmas present is given along with three words I hadn’t uttered in a long time (though under the influence of a redneck relaxation potion calling Bud Lite), and no, those three words were not “I’m gonna cum”.
I guess that sealed the envelope. I just entered the absolute incarnate of complication that would prove to wield an electric-shock-therapy-intense love. More righteous than any faith of a peasant to a Holy Spirit. With hope and wonder than a starry eyes youngster when he sees dreams of Santa, Jesus, or some other fake fairy tale shit.
So hours over an Instant messenger. I felt like writing Jerry Springer about “I’m in love with a screen name”, and yet, a year to the day of last seeing her, this girl comes to me in the flesh again. I’d almost forgotten what she looked like. And seeing her again had my tongue and cardio muscles quivering like the hamstrings of a cheetah about to spring into action. For two weeks straight, I’ve never felt so much love. Not emotionally. And certainly not physically. The thoughts we shared, secrets exposed, the problems that were about to be created, only to one day be solved and draw us closer—everything—even the tumor of Hell we have put each other through since that visit, has been bliss. This (in a bourgeois female voice) “to die for” Hispanic complexioned and a take no shit demeanored young woman, the classic Juliet, this rebel, a sexual explorer, this maternal instinct infused character, this little girl that never grew up, yet someone more mature than I is all I want now. Whether computer-side or bedside, every jug of emotion has been uncorked and my cup runnethed over.
I guess I’ll be patient until the pie cools off. Maybe this damned hospital waiting room of an intermezzo is better for the both of us. Besides, dessert is so much better when you wait and yearn. Waiting makes sure you don’t burn your tongue. But my mouth will water until then.
[ 11 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
 
wow. you got me. that second piece was funny, witty, personal...i don't know, i guess it seemed like something we might talk about over coffee (i myself am an alcoholic and all around degenerate dope addict that ruined himself for all drugs) anyhoo, i actually did like the second piece. the first one was a little rough and uncompromising for my taste, not the writing style, the subject matter. you see, i am married to a delicate young rosebud and now i see her face on all women and find myself coming to both their defence and rescue. nothing like marriage to make a feminist out of anyone.
that's all
seemore
(see...i can speak my opinions without offending anybody.)
 
wow... and i'm not wowing b/c u're being nice... i'm wowing b/c u liked.. thanx..
by all means i understand what you say about the first one. I wasn't totally expressing a side of me. By no means do i ever wish to hurt a woman. I love and adore women and have the upmost respect for them. The piece was more about my, and the male, aggression than any thing else..and the oddities of eccentrics..
[ 11 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
 
careful...that sounds a little like you "begging" people to read your stuff.
ammut'll getcha.
seemore
(see, i can't leave well enough alone. well, now i feel like ammut and i are even now, so, all's well that...oh however that ends, hmmn?)
 
Ok here it goes.... I sat down a read both of your peices, I enjoyed them both. The first one I read I looked at it and tried to understand the whole moral meaning hidden message whatever you might suppose be there. But then again there might not be anything there at all just a mere rambling from a sex deprived man. :) I am only playing but when you read it that is the feeling I gathered from it.
Now what really caught my attention in the whole peice was the pigeons.... this man whom you refer to as "he" but also as "I" (which was all really confusing at first) seems to be sitting feeding these pigeons.... but what he is doing, so simple the scene yet how horrid in what was truly his motive. Seems to resemble what went on later in your story with the girl and her dancing slipping the card in his pocket..... sealing her own fate her own death. As you say that it was this man who introduced her to such a world.
wet dream inside a nightmare in this bit you seem to say that this is a dream..... a sexual nightmare. When i read this and the senteces which followed describing the girl... it seemed to me that it wasn't a dream and in some way fucked up twisted way the man looked at all that had happened as some show some play. That he himself was involved in the daeth of the girl.
Visible garters..left one not connected.. Here when you wrote about her garters you worded in the way which before you wrote "left one not connected" the word "he" or "I" could be placed before it. Thus it saying"I left one not connected" I dunno maybe I am just crazy but I enjoy peeling your work apart and making you explain something that you too did not see.
I waltzed across the street making sure to stop and twirl so I could smile at the driver who just slammed on his brakes to keep from ruffling my fine suit. His awareness of himself and no concern of the girl showed that he was amused with the scene. The whole reference I made to the him seeing it as a play would be when u wrote
a sideshow for all passersby Once again it showed that he was pleased that all could see what had happened, maybe not pleased but not disturbed by it. Then later you go on to explain that this girl is innocent and that the character is proud to be the one chosen to "deflower" her. I find this funny since the only reason she is so called innocent is because the character sees her that way. He wants her that way.... I enjoyed this peice, but how you said "the piece was more about my, and the male, aggression than any thing else" I would have to disagree with you (funny how i seems to disagree yet you are the writer) it shows the digusting pleasures and things called taboo that the human race in general denies ever having pleasure in. I believe it showed more on how we are all sick in our own ways yet we still deny it to everyone and ourselves.....
Ok I can go on and on and on and you know what I could completely disect all of your work and point out contradictions and hidden messages but it would take entirely to much time... so you know what I'll just call you now :) I wonder if what i wrote even makes any sense oh well it doesn't have to I suppose
*Ammut*
[ 12 December 2002: Message edited by: AmmutTheDevourer ]
 
wow....the story was about a dream of a man... a dream i had... that i could see both through his eyes... and from an outside/unnoticed (3rd person) point of view. The "wet dream inside a nightmare"...was refering to his sick fantasy come to life.... inside of my dream. The garter meant nothing..merely a description...and yes it was to show how we're all sick in one way or another.
 
and to further answer you about how he is amused with himself and the whole scene but not the girl... that's a part of his perversion... he's just absorbed in his obsessive compulsive/destructive behaviour... and it's mixed with his ritsy taste in clothes, mannerisms,... something very Clockwork Orange...very Maquis De Sade so to speak.. but in the 1920's burlesque movement/new orleans jazz scene mix.. if that makes sense..
[ 12 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
 
You didn't have to explain, I can see that he is very self absorbed and that he cares only for himself. The fact is that you can pull out hidden meanings and things of that sort that you didn't mean to put there, showing that what you wrote can only be defined by the reader in a sense. That no matter how you wrote it when someone else reads it they are not going to see it the same way. This is why this is just going to end up inconclusive.
[ 12 December 2002: Message edited by: AmmutTheDevourer ]
 
FIrst of all let me just say that you translate your skill in writing quite well between the different media you have chosen - these stories are great, in that they allow the reader to build a very full picture, yet you do not make them see too much - you leave a lot to their imagination - great stuff...
The reason i haven't posted here earlier is due to my life suddenly filling, to the point of overflow, with things that must be done. I'm finally here now, but i only 1 hour to do computer related stuff, so feel special.... ;)
 
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