The New Humans: an ongoing serial

[Raz]

Hi all,

Mods, sorry if this is against guidelines...I couldn't find anything relating to it, but feel free to delete if you don't think it should be here....

I've started writing an online serial called The New Humans; the first two parts are up already and I'm going to update it weekly...I would realllly appreciate it if people could have a look and leave feedback there for me there.

Basically it's about a young woman named Cypra as she journeys through the darker side of the world and picks up some travellers along the way; it's written from her point of view as it happens, like a journal..

Anyway, I won't crap on about it but it would be really cool if peeps could help me out with this - it's at http://www.livejournal.com/users/the_new_humans

kthxbye!!!

Raz

 

[RareForm]

I don't see it's harm. I'll definitely be checking this out.

 

[bean_head]

Sorry couldn't bring myself to read it ...

White on black is really hard on the eyes ... maybe my vision is just temporarily wobbly.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

I'll check it out too - I think for the sake of the ever moving first page, bump this thread to let us know when you have updated!

 

[Raz]

As requested, bump! :D

In our latest installment, titled ..your victim my head.. Cypra finds out some more about her new pal, and has an encounter with some skinheads which goes pear-shaped in a very strange way....

Respond either here or by commenting at http://www.livejournal.com/users/the_new_humans (link's in my signature as well)

Thanks for the support on this guys, I appreciate it! And sorry the formatting doesn't work for you bean_head...I think it adds to the atmosphere of it, but if I get enough complaints I'll change it..

 

[(Wordy)]

Just read the first instalment. Some great writing. I'm currently in Melbourne and felt this like a vibration somewhere out in the night. (Some other future).

Agree the formatting is slightly offputting.

 

[Raz]

Next installment is up!

It's called ..my arms are wheels, my legs are wheels, my blood is pavement..

Sorry about the formatting...I really like it, I have experimented with a couple of different color schemes (including normal black text on white screen), but nothing has the same dramatic effect. If anyone who's a livejournal user has any suggestions on how I could better it, give us a yell!