~the eye~

[neverwas]

society says
beauty is in the eye of the beholder...
then why does a mirror
...................always tell a lie?
if cats have nine lives instead of one,
..............why after one,
..do they still die?

something simple and so pure
how can she be
....................so full of emotion?
ready
to burst and live
..............the impossible dream.
ready to hurt, ready to cry.

...ready to bleed.

 

[E-girl]

wow... maybe one of my favorite things you have written.
the style is so unique, and the point you are making is so interesting...
i really liked this.

 

[Chaotic Action Man]

i have to agree with egirl. this was really good. i like the questions that you pose. there is a lot of strong emotion packed into a few words. big tumbs up.

 

[KaideAlike44]

I liked this one a whole lot. the idea of this poem is awesome.

 

[Dandy]

Great work.
Enjoyed it,
leaves a lot of questions.

 

[neverwas]

thanx guys
egirl i think its one of the more different peices ive written. its style is somewhat different from my other peices

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Wow! A whole new dimension to your writing! I like it.

 

[katmeow]

Wow! A whole new dimension to your writing! I like it.

I'll second that!

Nice one

 

[TiberCross]

i like the slight shift in style. though those things are a matter of semantics when it's spoken aloud. good work. i really enjoyed this.

 

[FixXxer]

i actually shed a single tear. beautiful.

 

[neverwas]

thanx guys. your replies are awesome.

 

[Dekloren]

Still sexy as usual though!

 

[froggygirl]

I love your writing, this one was different, but still intresting.

 

[neverwas]

thanx for that :D

 

[frostyangel]

*GOOSEBUMPS* you get better everytime