the empty sounds

[paradoxcycle]

i feel like a sleeping child on the back of god. bird nests in my hair. i can't see the future, no more than i can see my bones.

i remember every line your body offered my eyes. curves of skin, like torn edges of soft fabric.

i remember your hands gentle over my speech. my speech that never met the air. you kept everything at a whisper.

 

[spinkle]

line break this. it would be a great piece with proper placement. nice work =)

 

[katmeow]

sweet

I like your stuff!

 

[paradoxcycle]

line break this. it would be a great piece with proper placement. nice work =)

Thanks for the input but I do not write like that. My writing holds it's own and I feel that breaking things up for emphasis is a weak technique.

 

[spinkle]

ah.